100 Word Challenge Week # 13



 I was out camping with my family when we saw a couple of deer together. My sister chased them and they ran but they were exhausted. finally when she gave up she came back also exhausted. we went to sleep a few hours later. when i woke up my sister was gone. i assumed she was chasing a rabbit today. turns out i was wrong she was in the lake. after my mom got my sister cleaned up we went on a hike. I saw the exact same deer  from yesterday. after i  told my sister Lilly she chased the deer right away.

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  1. colegrandia20December 7, 2018 at 9:16 AM

    Your story was smooth and I liked how your sister just chased everything she saw. Although I noticed the mistake where you didn't capitalize your I's.

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  2. dancer6482December 7, 2018 at 9:16 AM

    Your story flowed and sounded very nice. I liked your creativity with the story and it was interesting to read. You didn't capitalize the beginning of your sentences, next time make sure you are checking that.

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  3. MonkeyMan0724December 7, 2018 at 9:23 AM

    You didn't highlight the prompt words so remember to do that in the future.
    I think it was a decent story.

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  4. masterpigliv007December 7, 2018 at 9:30 AM

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  5. masterpigliv007December 7, 2018 at 9:32 AM

    your story was nice and smooth but you need to remember to capitalize your I's

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  6. Mrs BoyceDecember 11, 2018 at 11:49 PM

    Hi Kushi,
    I enjoyed reading your story. Well done.
    It sounds like you and your family had a nice camping trip.
    Just remember to use a capital letter at the beginning of a sentence.
    Good work this week.

    Mrs Boyce (Team 100WC)
    Cork.
    Ireland

    https://mrsboycesclass.100wc.net/

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